Michael L.

Move Beyond the Page, Analysis p59 - 60. 4, 5

 

p59 Q4. Compare the first paragraph from the early draft and first paragraph from the final draft of the essay. What are the differences? What do you think changed for King Jr. between the first draft and the final draft?

 

The difference between the first paragraph of the early draft and the final draft have a signficant difference in explaining the situation happened as described by King Jr. The introduction of the first draft differ its focus from religion to education as an opening statement. However the final draft are more explicit with the example he engaged before.

 

p60 Q5. Consider the two version of this essay in its entirety. What has changed from the first draft?

 

The first draft tends to be more general as it discuss the purpose of education from King Jr. perspective, such as talking about how he think education should equip people with the power to think efficiently, he also mentioned how we use our brain properly to identify the problems. Furthurmore, the final draft tend to uses more theoretic terms and examples to support his statement to make it even stronger. 

 

They Say/I say p 14:1

 

p14 Q1. Read the following paragraph from an essay by Emily Poe, a student at Furman University. Disregarding for the moment what Poe says, focus your attention on the phrases Poe uses to structure what she says (italicized here). Then write a new paragraph using Poe's as a model but replacing her topic, vegetarianism, with one of your own.

The term "vegetarian" tends to be synonymous with "tree-bugger" in many people's minds. They see vegetarianism as a cult that brain- washes its followers into eliminating an essential part of their daily diets for an abstract goal of "animal welfare." However, few vege-tarians choose their lifestyle just to follow the crowd. On the con-trary, many of these supposedly brainwashed people are actually independent thinkers, concerned citizens, and compassionate human beings. For the truth is that there are many very good rea-sons for giving up meat. Perhaps the best reasons are to improve the environment, to encourage humane treatment of livestock, or to enhance one's own health. In this essay, then, closely examining a vegetarian diet as compared to a meat-eater's diet will show that vegetarianism is clearly the better option for sustaining the Earth and all its inhabitants.

 

Climate change has now become a more serious problem and it is currently affecting people’s life. People with limited knowledge would not understand how the long term effects affect both planet earth and humans as the temperature is rising, but they perceived as an opportunity to go to the beach. However, this will speed up the ice melting in Antarctica. Through this effect, it will increase the water level and the water will cover the city in the next twenty year and ultimately make it impossible for people to go to the beach. The solution to this problem is that we should reduce our emission on carbon dioxide. The government should also be involved and execute policies that encourages people to drive less but to take the public transits. In this essay, I will be exploring how government can execute policies that can reduce the emission on carbon dioxide in the forms of social and economical aspect